discussion On Hold VN Ren'Py DAZ Daddy's Angel [v0.8.1b] [Gore Games]

[bobobarbarian]

It's not the best, it's my second game, If I ever made a 3rd (excluding Rayne's Reign: The Beginning coming here on September 24th)... if I had an idea for it (probably won't be better either).

Don't get me wrong, I like the game. But as Taco said above your prose needs work. That is completely normal for someone that is just starting to write stories of any kind. What you have as dialog so far in your VN is more of how an outline should be. Go over it a few times and add more text to it. You are probably thinking from the mind of one person while writing a scene and that's fine. but on each pass over it think from the mind of a different person in the scene until the dialog can be read as if it is an actual conversation that you are overhearing.

 

[TacoThuesday]

The thing is your renders are A+. You get your shots and angles right, the lighting is excellent and the scenes feels overall interesting too look at. Imo, if you can't find anyone, you really should look into using AI to help you out with the script and story development. That doesn't mean you can't add your touch or change things but it would help you follow a clear path forward in your story.
If I had the time, I would give you a hand but RL is busy as hell right now.

 

[goregames]

To anyone that actually knows and not just guessing...

So, is this complete or what? If not, then why is the word "Final" in the game name Thread, and even twice, if it is NOT completed?

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The version duplicated twice is an LC bug due to the "Latest Updates Addons"...

and "v0.6 FINAL" is the end of Version 6.

 

[drcstack]

So is this game any actual good? I hear a lot complaining about the story and writing. I'm also against extremely creepy protagonist. That's a turn off bro, don't make those types the main lead

 

[Nicest_Incest]

Story (if you want to call it that) was kinda hard to follow, so only surprise for me was it made it this far before an on-hold/abandoned.

 

[Moss]

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What are we supposed to click on the countertop? The game just freezes for me at this point.

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[goregames]

What are we supposed to click on the countertop? The game just freezes for me at this point.

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[Moss]

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Thanks!

 

[NotLooking]

So is this game any actual good? I hear a lot complaining about the story and writing. I'm also against extremely creepy protagonist. That's a turn off bro, don't make those types the main lead

The MC is not creepy. Her father is the creepy one and seems to be a bit on the fringes of the spectrum.

Story (if you want to call it that) was kinda hard to follow, so only surprise for me was it made it this far before an on-hold/abandoned.

Don't encourage the rage quit. They are clearly making an effort to make this and if funding wasn't an issue I'm certain they would have hired a writer to flesh out the story so they could focus on storyboarding, animating scenes, and coding. Constant crap talking and zealots trying to get in the way are why we keep losing devs in these genres.

@mistressgore I like what you have so far. I'd love it if it were more polished on the narrative side of things, but I understand most of the ideas you are trying to convey so far. Please take your time and slow down with the writing so you can make more depth around the ideas you want to show us. I'm certain there are several of us that appreciate your efforts.

 

[BrunoLC]

Any sex scenes with the MC atm? I've never tried the game before

 

[drcstack]

The MC is not creepy. Her father is the creepy one and seems to be a bit on the fringes of the spectrum.


Don't seems like it'll be for me then. Thanks for replying

 

[Gotenga]

I think the tag "Male Protagonist" should be removed. He makes zero choices and has no discernible role other than being the brunt of everything bad in the world of Lesbians. I am thankful for the skip all feature as it helps to get through to the updates. The man hating with female only vibe should have it's own tag too because it's pretty much the opposite of what the title implies. She is definitely NOT daddy's girl/angel or anything in this story. She isn't even possessively his in any sense. The renders are decent though.

 

[wedomore]

ON HOLD ! pfff called it !

 

[goregames]

ON HOLD ! pfff called it !

Why make it seem like I've abandoned it, any rumors or anyone saying this is actually wrong.

I'm making another game at this moment of this reply "Unbroken Lines", I can not (in mental health terms) work on 2 games at once.

So no, this game is not abandoned, it's only "On Hold" until I get my other games out/release them.

I just released a minor change to the game on Oct. 20th, so... not abandoned.

 

[wedomore]

Why make it seem like I've abandoned it, any rumors or anyone saying this is actually wrong.

I'm making another game at this moment of this reply "Unbroken Lines", I can not (in mental health terms) work on 2 games at once.

So no, this game is not abandoned, it's only "On Hold" until I get my other games out/release them.

Why not, I am actually working on 4 games at once, currently. I render 2 and do some scripting on 2. then swap back. One day you may get to see them on LC.

 

[goregames]

Why not, I am actually working on 4 games at once, currently. I render 2 and do some scripting on 2. then swap back. One day you may get to see them on LC.

Every developer has their own preferences on how to work/plan out their games, I work alone... you may too, but it will get all confusing for some.

You may be able to work on ALL 4 "at once", but I can not.

 

[Mr. Tearson]

Please keep it respectful. All Developers have their own way of working, including myself.

With that said, do not act like a troll. Consider everyone's position first before making an ass of yourself. From today and onwards, this thread will be heavily watched by the staffs.

 

[mrbobby]

Every developer has their own preferences on how to work/plan out their games, I work alone... you may too, but it will get all confusing for some.

You may be able to work on ALL 4 "at once", but I can not.

i completely agree, we all have our preferred work routine or time schedule many of us have other work,
but if I may offer a maybe different view or maybe try to shine the light from a different angle, I think what may earg some people is, we see so many many VNs/games and so on here on LC come and go, we have seen so many first time developers that put out a 2 min read though set up a patrion and more or less nothing more happens after that and a year later there "game" gets the abandoned tag, or we see the serial developers that have 5 games in development, almost nothing happens in any of them and after some time the developer disappears, getting burned out because they aren't making any money on their work, or simply move on because people lose interest and they are seeing 3 or 4 downloads on there updates,
another one, might be the added "line" you add on your games the "final" you put in your updates is something we have seen so absurd many times, a developer loses interest, puts together some hack 5 picture 20 word ending and slaps a "final" tag on it, and for people that may have followed maybe even paid in on there support pages for years, may have felt the burn so many times and from time to time, you will if you keep doing that see people like MR. wedomore here brake,
word of advice be more open with your communication, put the reason why you're putting the "on hold" tag on the front page, or maybe try coming up with a work rutine where you work on 1 game start to finish or where you feel you can work on a few stories at the same time,
good luck

 

[superpuma]

The file available on Gofile has a trojan virus

 

[Mr. Tearson]

The file available on Gofile has a trojan virus

Which one?