discussion VN Ren'Py DAZ Tomboy Supremacy [v0.10b] [Abere Lucifer]

[snieovi]

Pineapple on pizza!

 

[fd13333]

i think i like that game

 

[blobbob]

i love the writing. it's just so bat shit crazy

 

[Abere Lucifer]

The Tomboys are up. Work will start full time on Tomboy Supremacy's next Alpha soon.

 

[snieovi]

No offense taken. My early works were not my best. I have been trying to improve my games

The graphics have definitely improved a lot. I think we all appreciate your desire to improve. The stories themselves were also very funny beforehand.

 

[CometChaser]

I've said this before in other forums about Doc games, but the main thing they suffer from is getting away from the main thread really fast... this one started off incredibly promising, but it's sad to see it jumping off the rails again really quick in favor of 'wacky hijinks' instead of sticking to what was a really good, basic plot. Harem games are great, but there's a lot of leg work to do to get there, and too many bodies is more than any author can meaningfully write. Wouldn't harp on so much about it if it weren't SO CLOSE to being good though, I think just pulling back scale on a lot of these games would help tremendously.

 

[Abere Lucifer]

I've said this before in other forums about Doc games, but the main thing they suffer from is getting away from the main thread really fast... this one started off incredibly promising, but it's sad to see it jumping off the rails again really quick in favor of 'wacky hijinks' instead of sticking to what was a really good, basic plot. Harem games are great, but there's a lot of leg work to do to get there, and too many bodies is more than any author can meaningfully write. Wouldn't harp on so much about it if it weren't SO CLOSE to being good though, I think just pulling back scale on a lot of these games would help tremendously.

These are the only main characters. All the others are basically side characters to push the story along. Also you should have noticed right away the story was wacky. I write comedy. That what I do. I understand it's not everyone's cup of tea. I respect that. Though I must be doing something right because I am in the 1% of devs that makes over $1,000 a month. Just saying. To each their own I guess.

 

[CometChaser]

These are the only main characters. All the others are basically side characters to push the story along. Also you should have noticed right away the story was wacky. I write comedy. That what I do. I understand it's not everyone's cup of tea. I respect that. Though I must be doing something right because I am in the 1% of devs that makes over $1,000 a month. Just saying. To each their own I guess.

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I'm actually really glad you've taken the time to respond, thank you for that.
Just to re-iterate, your games are good, it just feels frustrating sometimes how close they are to great without quite hitting the mark. I think your point here about having a good core cast with a bunch of side characters actually gets at a broader point in my earlier criticism, where if it were JUST this main cast, with the amount of time put in those side characters focused on them, you could cover a lot more ground. A yard wide and a mile deep so to speak.
In regards to comedy though, it's not a bad thing to have it included, just so long as it doesn't detract from the plot. Lots of other games like Four Elements Trainer are just as, if not more, bombastic, but it never feels like it pulls away from the plot. Sometimes your games do feel that way, like the jokes and the randomness are non-sequitors that don't really align with what's going on or feel like they distract from what's actually happening.
And one last time, I do like the games on a surface level. 23 Daughters was perfectly enjoyable, which is more than I can say for a good ninety percent of the content you get on sites like this. You clearly have some great ideas, and they're getting better as you go along. I liked Daddy's Girls better than 23 Daughters, and I think I'm gonna like this game better than that. I really hope you keep at it, because I'm really looking forward to seeing what you'll do not just with this game, but any ideas you develop with even more experience.

 

[Abere Lucifer]

I'm actually really glad you've taken the time to respond, thank you for that.
Just to re-iterate, your games are good, it just feels frustrating sometimes how close they are to great without quite hitting the mark. I think your point here about having a good core cast with a bunch of side characters actually gets at a broader point in my earlier criticism, where if it were JUST this main cast, with the amount of time put in those side characters focused on them, you could cover a lot more ground. A yard wide and a mile deep so to speak.
In regards to comedy though, it's not a bad thing to have it included, just so long as it doesn't detract from the plot. Lots of other games like Four Elements Trainer are just as, if not more, bombastic, but it never feels like it pulls away from the plot. Sometimes your games do feel that way, like the jokes and the randomness are non-sequitors that don't really align with what's going on or feel like they distract from what's actually happening.
And one last time, I do like the games on a surface level. 23 Daughters was perfectly enjoyable, which is more than I can say for a good ninety percent of the content you get on sites like this. You clearly have some great ideas, and they're getting better as you go along. I liked Daddy's Girls better than 23 Daughters, and I think I'm gonna like this game better than that. I really hope you keep at it, because I'm really looking forward to seeing what you'll do not just with this game, but any ideas you develop with even more experience.

Well, thank you. I will admit I am kind of new to writing. I am getting better I believe. As they say "Repetition is the key to success?" I also am grateful for your feedback.

 

[CometChaser]

Well, thank you. I will admit I am kind of new to writing. I am getting better I believe. As they say "Repetition is the key to success?" I also am grateful for your feedback.

No problem man, always good to hear back from creators who are fellow men of culture.

 

[beave03]

I love how crazy these games are. Doc is a special mind

 

[unite126]

Crazy game, surprised it's not in the member+ section

 

[Abere Lucifer]

Work will begin on the Tomboy Supremacy 0.5 Alpha on Sunday. Stay tuned...

 

[Jandu]

This one looks promising. I hpe story will be as interesting as models are.

 

[Abere Lucifer]

A little something for everyone. Work begins full-time on the Tomboy Supremacy 0.5 Alpha on Sunday. Stay tuned...

 

[Aloprt]

tomboys <3

 

[nexus55555]

Love this, great job.

 

[Abere Lucifer]

Soon...

 

[Abere Lucifer]

Luna in the rain.

 

[Abere Lucifer]

I'm back to work on Tomboy Supremacy tomorrow. The return of the Broinne Sisters is immanent.