discussion KN Ren'Py DAZ The Trio [Chapter 4] [Anonymous]

[duckydoodoo]

so this is a story of an unemployed man who cant make coffee at home and had nothing better to do every day then ride his bike to the cafe and home again?

i dont wanna be the wtf guy, but wtf was the point of making us watch him wake up drive his bike to the cafe and home every single day and nothing else for days. i get story building blah blah blah, but what a waste of development time just recycling renders and coding in the repetitive days for zero pay off. by the time MC interacted with anyone i had zero interest and no patience left.

one day this might be something, but now its just really pretty trash. like if a toddler ate a box of crayons and threw them up. sure itll look really cool, but its not something you would ever wanted to see. a lil harsh but it just sounded funny in my head

 

[Lostandquiet73]

so this is a story of an unemployed man who cant make coffee at home and had nothing better to do every day then ride his bike to the cafe and home again?

i dont wanna be the wtf guy, but wtf was the point of making us watch him wake up drive his bike to the cafe and home every single day and nothing else for days. i get story building blah blah blah, but what a waste of development time just recycling renders and coding in the repetitive days for zero pay off. by the time MC interacted with anyone i had zero interest and no patience left.

one day this might be something, but now its just really pretty trash. like if a toddler ate a box of crayons and threw them up. sure itll look really cool, but its not something you would ever wanted to see. a lil harsh but it just sounded funny in my head

Bro, he's not unemployed. Did you read the monologue? He found himself a different job thinking it would challenge him more and it turns out that it's actually very relaxed compared to his old job, so he has plenty of free time. However, I do agree that the first chapter is very repetitive, or redundant, and the developer could have cut a lot of clutter and the story would have been left unchanged.

 

[fthegovernment]

Graphics, camera work, sound fx and programming are pretty good. The two major flaws are the writing and plot. It's my assumption that the dev is French, living in Germany. The aesthetics just scream introspectively efficiency lol. It's dragging it down to-be-honest. I'll reserve giving it a star rating until it gets a little more down the road. Otherwise, I'd have to give it 2 1/2 stars for "almost" being good.

when will you be making a game / avn ?
I cant wait to finally get something perfect.

so this is a story of an unemployed man who cant make coffee at home and had nothing better to do every day then ride his bike to the cafe and home again?

i dont wanna be the wtf guy, but wtf was the point of making us watch him wake up drive his bike to the cafe and home every single day and nothing else for days. i get story building blah blah blah, but what a waste of development time just recycling renders and coding in the repetitive days for zero pay off. by the time MC interacted with anyone i had zero interest and no patience left.

one day this might be something, but now its just really pretty trash. like if a toddler ate a box of crayons and threw them up. sure itll look really cool, but its not something you would ever wanted to see. a lil harsh but it just sounded funny in my head

no, this is a story of an employed man who cant make coffee at home and has nothing better to do every day then ride his bike to the cafe and home again

 

[duckydoodoo]

if you all cant tell my post was intentionally ambiguous than theres nothing i can do for you. also why correct unemployed(even if you dont realize it was intentional) when you dont disagree with the point of my post? must be unable to let a moment to correct someone or be right pass peacefully

 

[fthegovernment]

if you all cant tell that my post was intentionally ambiguous (and totally fucking hilarious) than there's nothing i can do for you.

 

[-CookieMonster666-]

so this is a story of an unemployed man who cant make coffee at home and had nothing better to do every day then ride his bike to the cafe and home again?

no, this is a story of an employed man who cant make coffee at home and has nothing better to do every day then ride his bike to the cafe and home again

This guy rides a bike to a café?

 

[LewisCarroll]

The creampie tag without a vaginal sex, anal sex, or oral sex tag? How's that work?

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The pastries are in the background in the cafe'.

so this is a story of an unemployed man who cant make coffee at home and had nothing better to do every day then ride his bike to the cafe and home again?

i dont wanna be the wtf guy, but wtf was the point of making us watch him wake up drive his bike to the cafe and home every single day and nothing else for days. i get story building blah blah blah, but what a waste of development time just recycling renders and coding in the repetitive days for zero pay off. by the time MC interacted with anyone i had zero interest and no patience left.

one day this might be something, but now its just really pretty trash. like if a toddler ate a box of crayons and threw them up. sure itll look really cool, but its not something you would ever wanted to see. a lil harsh but it just sounded funny in my head

Could literally have written one sentence to cover the passage of time instead of forcing us to look at his wang so many times lol

when will you be making a game / avn ?
I cant wait to finally get something perfect.

The alpha will be out some time in Sept.. The point of differing opinions is to get alternative views. I don't like the story. Take that as you will.

Spoiler: More Detailed Critique

To be more specific, it comes off as creepy tbh. Don't get me wrong. I like a good corruption game, but this one comes off as a grooming fantasy (no options or game play). Worse, it uses French style introspection and over-the-top romanticism too - which makes it feel a little slimy. Leon the Professional did it WAY better because he never expected to fall in love with her nor take advantage of her. Here, if the MC put on a trench coat and her bing on a swing, the stereotype would have been complete - even to the point of lurking by a school yard. I find it hilarious. That may appeal to some, but it doesn't to me. I think differing opinions should be embraced.

 

[DameJudyMench]

if you all cant tell that my post was intentionally ambiguous (and totally fucking hilarious) than there's nothing i can do for you.

we got a little distracted by somebody doing the repeater

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[NotLooking]

We should be happy he didn't make the MC a boy child with a goatee again. Take what you can get. I don't anticipate the writing will be any more refined than any of the prior titles they've made. On the bright side, they do generally finish their short stories.

 

[Alex2033]

I liked this one. Super cute . Looking forward to future chapters!

 

[LiriusArt]

We should be happy he didn't make the MC a boy child with a goatee again. Take what you can get. I don't anticipate the writing will be any more refined than any of the prior titles they've made. On the bright side, they do generally finish their short stories.

"It’s interesting that you keep trying my games even though they apparently don’t appeal to you.


Maybe you secretly find something unique or exciting in them after all—even if you won’t admit it? Or are you just looking for a reason to be upset?


Either way: I make games for people who enjoy them—and luckily, there are plenty of those. If my projects aren’t for you, that’s totally fine. But save us both the time and focus on things that do excite you instead.


For everyone else who’s open to new ideas: I always welcome honest feedback and constructive discussions!


Best regards,— LiriusArt"

 

[daddy-s]

KN with piss drinking? or currently KN and maybe not in the future? It only being listed under current tags got me wondering, wanted to try it but no point if forced into such fetishes.

 

[-CookieMonster666-]

KN with piss drinking? or currently KN and maybe not in the future? It only being listed under current tags got me wondering, wanted to try it but no point if forced into such fetishes.

Dafuq? There's no piss drinking in this, and there's not even urination in the tags. Did you mean to post in a different thread?

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[buttfan]

Dafuq? There's no piss drinking in this, and there's not even urination in the tags. Did you mean to post in a different thread?

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It's listed in the planned genre tags:

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[-CookieMonster666-]

It's listed in the planned genre tags:

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Oh, I see. I didn't bother looking there, because they said: "It only being listed under current tags"... which isn't true. It's not in the current tags at all. BTW, @LiriusArt, some of what your Genre spoiler has as current tags are missing from this game thread.

 

[Irregular73]

I'm kinda hyped to see what comes of this. Looking forward to more.

 

[huhyunjin]

Translated: Hey little girl, are you hungry for some "sausage" ? Cuz I got one of those !

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[libertygtx]

so this is a story of an unemployed man who cant make coffee at home and had nothing better to do every day then ride his bike to the cafe and home again?

i dont wanna be the wtf guy, but wtf was the point of making us watch him wake up drive his bike to the cafe and home every single day and nothing else for days. i get story building blah blah blah, but what a waste of development time just recycling renders and coding in the repetitive days for zero pay off. by the time MC interacted with anyone i had zero interest and no patience left.

one day this might be something, but now its just really pretty trash. like if a toddler ate a box of crayons and threw them up. sure itll look really cool, but its not something you would ever wanted to see. a lil harsh but it just sounded funny in my head

No, this is a story about an employed man who fucked a 14 year old girl and now is hooked and is searching for his next target because he's getting withdrawals. It's actually really good and hot and can't wait to see in what ways he corrupts the girl(s). Why are you on lewdcorner anyway, especially in the GAMES+ section, meant for "illegal" games?

On topic, i really liked the game O.P, the only weird and kinda lazy part was how he met the girls. You could have made an encounter, maybe one of the girls invite him for a drink since they keep seeing him sitting alone, or they ask for help with homework one day. But instead you made him sit at the table , with them, for days/weeks, without speaking with them, which is really weird and would never really happen, and that just killed my immersion. No way in hell those girls would sit at the table with the random quiet guy they kept seeing daily, especially after he PURPOSEFULY sat at the table the girls always sit at. I know they are kids but this would never happen IRL. And again, i know this is a game, but its sad cuz the rest of the game really made sense and was so immersive and i got hooked excited about what ways he cooks up to corrupt the girl(s). But that one part was just so out of order.
Anyway thanks for reading my rant.

 

[User_43891]

So the only sex so far were from MC's flashback at the beginning of the game. The <oral sex> and <vaginal sex> tags should be added. The <creampie> is more implied, so that tag is dubious.

Also, unless I missed it, there was no <masturbation> to be seen anywhere in the game.

And most hilariously, no <loli> tag even though MC was fucking a 14 yr old.

> Edit to note that tags have been updated

After the flashback, MC teaches us Predatory Grooming 101, by homing in on the most vulnerable underage girl who obviously has a bad family life as his next "prospective girlfriend".

You can tell he thinks he's being romantic, but he's creepy AF. The cafe waitress is already getting the cafe's surveillance footage together for when Sadface McBowlcut goes missing.

 

[ZX6R]

A waste of time all of the 5 minutes i pressed ctrl to skip.