1/3
3 Years of Service
The first rather weak Update imo. Don't really like the Phone gimmick, it feels unnecessary tedious to use, it's more "style over substance", but that is the more minor critic and probably also a thing of personal liking. The more serious problem I have with the plot, in general as well in this Update. The whole "Kitka is Pregnant" thing was already teased for 1, 2?, Updates before this, so it was no real surprise and more of a "finally!" thing when it was acknowledged by the Story. On the other side the new Incest angle for Audrey and her Sister came rather out of nowhere, if I didn't forgot or overlooked foreshadowing for it that is, and while I get the reason for it, I think it could have been introduced much better if it had been given some of the teasing moments of Kitkas Pregnancy for example. And at last that Annie is getting pulled into the whole chaos was to be expected and I'm happy to see it, tho I think it would have been better to include the outing with her in the Update, at least until she asks the unavoidable question or so for a (evil) cliffhanger.
All in all it was the first Update that disappointed me a little bit and left me a bit unsatisfied. The Plotlines feel all over the place and the missing of a strong overarching Narrative makes it that all the development that happens feels kind of aimless. There's no real sense of Priority or urgency in the Plotlines, as if there is no real Plan on where to go with them.
All in all it was the first Update that disappointed me a little bit and left me a bit unsatisfied. The Plotlines feel all over the place and the missing of a strong overarching Narrative makes it that all the development that happens feels kind of aimless. There's no real sense of Priority or urgency in the Plotlines, as if there is no real Plan on where to go with them.