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3 Years of Service
I started the update having fun in the maze and all that, but honestly I didn’t understand the decision for Cora to suddenly go “I’m going to get naked” and then the two of them immediately start sexual stuff. Like, if the idea was for it to be something slow, a gradual build with her, including aspects of her being innocent and not really understanding what all of that was, why suddenly hand her sex so easily? It doesn’t make sense to me, especially because it was so abrupt. There was no tension built, nothing. It just came out of nowhere.
Honestly, it would have been way more interesting if, in her innocence, she just wanted to make him happy, started touching him without really knowing why, and then suddenly noticed his reaction, him being conflicted, since earlier he told himself that it was wrong. But then suddenly it’s like, “now it’s not wrong anymore.” You can see how that sudden shift, especially in her and mainly in him, just isn’t justified. Even something as simple as a hand job, with her confused about what she was doing, not understanding whether he liked it or not, looking at him with innocent eyes, while he’s mentally torn for allowing it, an awkward, almost embarrassing scene for both of them, could have been the beginning of something bigger later on. But instead it’s just, all of a sudden, “here, take everything at once.”
Honestly, it killed my interest. It’s like serving dessert right away, what’s the fun of the chase now? Sorry, dev, but I really think this was a big mistake.
Honestly, it would have been way more interesting if, in her innocence, she just wanted to make him happy, started touching him without really knowing why, and then suddenly noticed his reaction, him being conflicted, since earlier he told himself that it was wrong. But then suddenly it’s like, “now it’s not wrong anymore.” You can see how that sudden shift, especially in her and mainly in him, just isn’t justified. Even something as simple as a hand job, with her confused about what she was doing, not understanding whether he liked it or not, looking at him with innocent eyes, while he’s mentally torn for allowing it, an awkward, almost embarrassing scene for both of them, could have been the beginning of something bigger later on. But instead it’s just, all of a sudden, “here, take everything at once.”
Honestly, it killed my interest. It’s like serving dessert right away, what’s the fun of the chase now? Sorry, dev, but I really think this was a big mistake.
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