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3 Years of Service
Great game and I love it. As someone else said, I can't wait for the corruption of more girls (equally hot, I hope) and the family. I think your hebe girl hits the perfect sweet spot. While I can't wait to corrupt the younger sister, I hope she's only a year younger, not the young child that's in the image for that imagining. That said, I do think this is pretty dark. Obviously, I like dark as a pure fantasy, and what can be more pure fantasy than AI. No complaints about any of it (though her fantasy of being killed was more than a little offputting. I think it would be better to play on the fear of abandonment. But that's me and you're writing to your own kinks. I'm just standing by, admiring....)
Videos are great, btw! and so is the model (obviously)
As far as future kinks to add, I would love to see anal. I'm not that into impregnation, and the humiliation of coerced anal is as hot as anything!
Specific items:
1. Screen 1 - "Enter the main characters [s.b. "character's"] name and age..." - these two screens are confusing. The standard expectation is that we're going to be putting in her name and age, so even though I put in my fictional avatar's name, I put in her fantasy age. (The screen asking for the MC's age is actually a page later in the story after the narration says "... his gaze settles on a pretty young woman nearby...")
Later, when I find out that I've got a VIP room for my 15th birthday, that was a little off. Getting the MC's name and age should be done at a blank screen before the story starts to avoid this confusion.
2. Line 20 - s.b. "Someone so good[-]looking and well[-]dress[ed] must be here with a lot of people, wouldn't he?)"
3. I'm sure you know this already, but her drink changes as she walks down the hall.
4. Line 27 - tears are a little early, but I love the tears....
5. Line 30 - hear panties have disappeared early. We're going to be ripping off the panties later. (plus the tears have disappeared).
6. Line 52 - what a GREAT image!
7. Images are really consistent and lovely, but I think they start to drift around line 92. The image at line 106 seems way off, with a much broader face and wider waist. (I haven't gone through all the choices yet, so don't know how the other choices play out.)
8. The girls at line 149 look AMAZING (even though they are already pregnant). I can't wait to fuck them!
9. Great family, but can we age mom down by 8 or 9 years and age little sis up by 5 or 6? (line 153)
10. Having a no pregnancy option would be great, with the future pictures defaulting to the same girls without pregnancy....
Keep up the great work, and I can't wait for chapter 2 (3, 4, 5, 6, etc!)
Videos are great, btw! and so is the model (obviously)
As far as future kinks to add, I would love to see anal. I'm not that into impregnation, and the humiliation of coerced anal is as hot as anything!
Specific items:
1. Screen 1 - "Enter the main characters [s.b. "character's"] name and age..." - these two screens are confusing. The standard expectation is that we're going to be putting in her name and age, so even though I put in my fictional avatar's name, I put in her fantasy age. (The screen asking for the MC's age is actually a page later in the story after the narration says "... his gaze settles on a pretty young woman nearby...")
Later, when I find out that I've got a VIP room for my 15th birthday, that was a little off. Getting the MC's name and age should be done at a blank screen before the story starts to avoid this confusion.
2. Line 20 - s.b. "Someone so good[-]looking and well[-]dress[ed] must be here with a lot of people, wouldn't he?)"
3. I'm sure you know this already, but her drink changes as she walks down the hall.
4. Line 27 - tears are a little early, but I love the tears....
5. Line 30 - hear panties have disappeared early. We're going to be ripping off the panties later. (plus the tears have disappeared).
6. Line 52 - what a GREAT image!
7. Images are really consistent and lovely, but I think they start to drift around line 92. The image at line 106 seems way off, with a much broader face and wider waist. (I haven't gone through all the choices yet, so don't know how the other choices play out.)
8. The girls at line 149 look AMAZING (even though they are already pregnant). I can't wait to fuck them!
9. Great family, but can we age mom down by 8 or 9 years and age little sis up by 5 or 6? (line 153)
10. Having a no pregnancy option would be great, with the future pictures defaulting to the same girls without pregnancy....
Keep up the great work, and I can't wait for chapter 2 (3, 4, 5, 6, etc!)
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