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EyeWish
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Hi, I finally completed my English re-write of this game. It was a massive undertaking , considering how far into development the game is, but I felt the game deserved some TLC. Elsa94 created a very cool game, with a good story, and a number of appealing characters.
Ver 0.19 - I am unsure if walkthrough mods will work with this version as some clickable choices may have been edited, but the outcomes associated with those choices were not changed in any way.
What I did:
1- Corrected the English translation. It was the only thing, IMO, that was hurting the game.
2- Fixed name mismatches. There were many instances where the dialogue on screen did not match the correct person.
3- Improved dialogue during heart warming scenes.
4- Added more humorous lines to the crazy characters, especially Allana and Glory. Also, the study group and test scenes.
5- Stayed true to the original story and the characters. I have been in conversation with Elsa, and this was a concern of hers/his(?). If anyone feels I strayed too far, please let me know.
6- Removed a lot of redundant lines and replaced them with more relevant dialogue. I felt the reader didn't need to be constantly reminded that it was a government sponsored program.
What I didn't do:
1- Fix coding issues.
2- Deviate from the story. I believe it is true to Elsa94's vision.
3- Fix every single line. I would say that I covered about 95% of the story. There was an awful lot, and I may have missed some dialogue here and there.
I do not know if old saves can be migrated into this version. I would suggest starting from the beginning anyway, to receive the full impact of these changes.
Elsa94 is also interested in your thoughts and may consider this version for the Steam release.
Ver 0.19 - I am unsure if walkthrough mods will work with this version as some clickable choices may have been edited, but the outcomes associated with those choices were not changed in any way.
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What I did:
1- Corrected the English translation. It was the only thing, IMO, that was hurting the game.
2- Fixed name mismatches. There were many instances where the dialogue on screen did not match the correct person.
3- Improved dialogue during heart warming scenes.
4- Added more humorous lines to the crazy characters, especially Allana and Glory. Also, the study group and test scenes.
5- Stayed true to the original story and the characters. I have been in conversation with Elsa, and this was a concern of hers/his(?). If anyone feels I strayed too far, please let me know.
6- Removed a lot of redundant lines and replaced them with more relevant dialogue. I felt the reader didn't need to be constantly reminded that it was a government sponsored program.
What I didn't do:
1- Fix coding issues.
2- Deviate from the story. I believe it is true to Elsa94's vision.
3- Fix every single line. I would say that I covered about 95% of the story. There was an awful lot, and I may have missed some dialogue here and there.
I do not know if old saves can be migrated into this version. I would suggest starting from the beginning anyway, to receive the full impact of these changes.
Elsa94 is also interested in your thoughts and may consider this version for the Steam release.
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3 Years of Service
I agree, it is a very good game, but adding more models, I didn't understand that part? (you mean more women) if it is more women, it is preferable, it is not enough since there are so many.
P.S: what a great game and its scenes also including the teacher.
EyeWish
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If you are trying the English version, please use my copy. Detailed changes posted above. Game link below. It is much improved over the original translation.
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Sample of improved dialogue:
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I think it's limited to the removal of school uniforms. This is something Steam has insisted on for other games as well.
1 Year of Service
Currently playing through this. Olivia is without a doubt my favorite, she has an amazingly cute design. The gallery has some really nice gravure shots. I like the concept of the game overall.
The english translation tho, it's a bit rough. It's not unbearable, and certainly not unreadable by any means. The biggest issue I have is the flow of the dialogue. Characters saying "it is" instead of "it's." Things like that make the reading awkward and it doesn't feel like a conversation is really taking place. Another thing, which is more of a nitpicky thing, is I wish the dialogue boxes for the thinking characters would be italicized. I don't pay attention to the name of the character speaking cause generally it's pretty easy to distinguish who is talking, but I don't realize a character is thinking something until afterwards.
The english translation tho, it's a bit rough. It's not unbearable, and certainly not unreadable by any means. The biggest issue I have is the flow of the dialogue. Characters saying "it is" instead of "it's." Things like that make the reading awkward and it doesn't feel like a conversation is really taking place. Another thing, which is more of a nitpicky thing, is I wish the dialogue boxes for the thinking characters would be italicized. I don't pay attention to the name of the character speaking cause generally it's pretty easy to distinguish who is talking, but I don't realize a character is thinking something until afterwards.
3 Years of Service
Have you tried the english-rewrite by EyeWish?
https://lewdcorner.com/threads/nudist-college-v0-19-elsa.4502/post-741857
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1 Year of Service
Didn't know about it before, but apparently the file doesn't exist with that link anymore.
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3 Years of Service
You stopped before most of the drama and rewrites - those happened between about there and 0.10. I think he's still updating some old slides to replace the uniforms, and the English translation of the dialogue has gotten worse, but if you pick it up again you should get most of the benefits without as much of the pain. On that other site, someone is doing a clean up of the English in the script that I'll try when the next update comes around. Even a side VN now that focuses on Olivia and seeing things from her perspective.Completely forgot about this one... last version i played is .05 good to see it's still going.
