Well man, I didn't want to be harsh or salty, sorry about that... I was trying to say that for us, that wonderer like the bees from flower to flower looking for something new and interesting, it would be more convincing a set of screenshots more appealing to make us understand what is inside your AVN.
I had listen you and got it. Right from the start, I had realize that I can't see the text... it is too small and I'm too old. Each character has own text color ok... some red I really not see it (I didn't come to struggle to read pages and pages of txt)
And from this first problem result one BIG need.... your AVN need to be VOICED !!! Each character must have unique voice and let say, each time it spoke it come forward and each character would have a image to express some emotions like anger, wonder, happiness/laugh, also when character think and so on...
Character looks: Paul is too old, Leto is too young, mother is too young, reverend mother.....
A mention at the beginning about the need to click on the character on the screen for more interactions I think is welcome. (I was stuck between Paul room, corridor and storage because I didn't know that I need to click on the character present on the screen)
Overall my opinion if it's matters or interests someone: This is NOT a FAP material

Story could be unique and interesting but it not convince me or better say it is not what I was looking for... or not for me.
Good luck with your creation man !