Off to a great start but it begs for proofreading because the english is butchered and he breaks character too many times by using human slang rather than their planet of origin (Can't remember the specifics, I fly through these books). Reusing the opening plot from the terminator movies was a nice surprise, though. Haven't seen that in a while.
The twins and the older daughter are hot, strong redeeming value in them. But there's also an inconsistency between quality: The women look amazing but everybody else (The thugs in the alley, that guy in the bar, mc) look like default mii's. I'm concerned that these glaring issues won't be fixed because rather than work on the obvious problem with the script, he/she just moved on with updates and another chapter. I'll wait one more update to see what happens then write it off if it's still as bad as it is now because it reads like johnny-5 and jar-jar binks conceived a love child that grew up, hates his life and freelances on projects like these. It's reasonable to assume that it'll be fubar'd after two more updates because of all the work that it needs to bring it back to something legible.
If you overlook the obvious, it has what could be a great story. But, I just can't do it.