Has the MC fucked either the mom or his asian sis yet? Or anyone of note? The story line is a massive jumble of incoherent nonsense. I am guessing the author isn't English speaking, at minimum it's not their first language. Great renders though, but I think if you hired a writer *(most vn's fall short of any actual story or comprehensible dialect resembling a story-line. Not everyone can build worlds, crafting the artwork is kudos enough, let the word smiths tickle the brain, while the renderer tickles their eyeballs

Please don't take offense to the "hire a writer" thing, it's meant to be constructive criticism. Truly. I mean either hire a writer or plug your script into chat gpt with a few key parameters to punch up the dialog.