discussion VN Ren'Py DAZ Altered [v0.6] [Mr.J]

[User_60082]

Comment seem promising

 

[igotnostringsonme]

Great way to start off. Needs a bit of polish on some of the grammar, some of the coding seems a bit out of wack as there were some instances the names and descriptors weren't pulling correctly, but a solid story.

 

[jjansen]

Looking forward to more updates

 

[branko]

A promising start, story seems interesting, my wife hates how the mc looks but like me she enjoyed the small content, we'll keep and eye on this one.

 

[mkujo]

Could use an MC age changing option and other ages calculated from that. Default 23 makes the twins 18 but I'd prefer 21...

 

[darktom]

Looks interesting, not a bad beginning but I won’t review until a few more updates come through

 

[simple6969]

looks good might give this one a try

 

[TinyTrooper]

I'll be watching this one closely as it progresses.

 

[vagmesh]

looks promising will keep an eye on this one after it gets some patches

 

[capt21]

It's on my radar for sure

 

[Robertsm1982]

It looks interesting, we'll 'ave to let it grow a couple updates.

 

[Naps-On-Dirt]

The writing is bad from a technical standpoint, there's a lack of punctuation and too many run-on sentences, it reads kinda flat and rushed. Really needs a proofreader.

 

[El Buho]

Tag says incest, so is it mom incest? and if so which on e is the mom?

 

[hrmm]

Tag says incest, so is it mom incest? and if so which on e is the mom?

No incest yet (it's one of those tags that often slips by the "should only be tagged if it's already in the game" guideline), unless you count Saeko (not blood related, but she and the MC see each other as siblings).

From left to right is: Saeko (fellow abductee and adoptive sibling), Delilah (little sister), back of MC's head, Vanessa (Mom), Deborah (twin sister of Delilah), Sandra (Aunt), and not pictured: Laura (Aunt).


You set the relationships at the start of the game. They're fairly obvious, but just to make things easier, in order they are: Mom, Dad, son, sister, brother, Aunt, nephew, Aunt, nephew. (The second set of Aunt/nephew uses the same variables as the first, so you could leave Sandra's blank to save yourself a bit of typing.)

 

[holadea]

need some mind control and mind break

 

[holadea]

when will be the next update, looking forward to it

 

[bibblo]

played it a bit, not bad for the amount of content available atm , will come back after few updates

 

[Teixeira]

Game os looking really good keep up the good work

 

[ozpush]

Taken from itch.io by dsz1010.

Hey, I had a critique: I don't recommend allowing the player to set the relationships for characters without really specific information because we don't know who these people will be in your storyline later.

Just saying that someone is "really special to you" isn't enough for determining who they are in relation to the main character. I don't know if they will have dialog later explicitly describing their relationship together or not. I don't know their ages compared to the main character, I don't even know if I live with them or if they are strangers in the intro to the game.

I started reading the actual plot parts of the game and then realized that all my prior choices were wrong because I didn't have any context. Now the dialog is confusing because it turns out that I was naming my parents. I hope I explained this properly. I basically had to restart the game by scrolling back and redoing all of it.

If you have a certain idea in mind like family-related content or something, put that as the default and then have the player decide if they don't like that or not. Then they can change it to their own preference (like renaming mom to landlord, sisters as other tenants, etc. This is similar to how other games handle it).

Not trying to steel his thunder but agreeing to it as I'm not good a putting words together.
For a first release good job can't wait for what is to come in the future.

 

[User_21165]

wasnt bad, keeping an eye on this one